literature

Can't cry

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I don’t cry,
cant.
You think that I can’t feel
I don’t know what it is to hurt
so deeply you want to scream
and scream
and scream untill your lungs
collapse from the effort.
From the pain.
I can’t understand.
If I can’t cry, I can’t understand.
I’m distant.
distant
from emotion
distant from others
distant from the world.
I can’t cry. I can’t feel. I can’t know.
Just because my cheeks stay dry
doesn’t mean that I can’t feel
that dull ache in the pit of my stomach
An intense pain beyond
words.
I don’t cry.
My pain is silent;
An empty pain
I don’t cry
because my pain
is inside.
I think it's pretty obvious from this, but I'm not very comfortable with this style of poetry yet. It was an experiment more than anything, because I wondered how I'd actually manage.
Incidentally, it is based around fact. I do have some strange lack of tears for some reason. I don't cry at anything. People tend to assume that I don't feel because of that. It's basically a stream of consciousness from me in the midst of a pretty bad day.
I'M NOT EMO :| haha

I tried to do a lot using enjambement, but I don't know if it shows?

Any criticism would be MASSIVELY appreciated, because I'm not sure whether this style suits me.
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